Hi Chaotic Evil,

This is a wonderful article. The title is direct and to the point. The reader knows exactly what they will be getting out of the article. I was fascinated with your topic and began to read right away to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about the struggles women face in this world just because they are women. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:


1)basis at even at work-the first "at" is not necessary here.

You use an aggressive style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.