%%USERNAME%%    %%ACCWORDS%% %%ONOFF%% |
 Review #4757800 |
 | Shadow and Light Poetry  [13+] Shadow and Light poetry  |
| (5.0)| A Review for “the Great Cicada Invasion of 2024” entered in the Red Wheelbarrow Poetry Contest   Thank You for your entry! Dear JCosmos Thanks so much for being a part of the recent Red Wheelbarrow activity with your entry! Your poem, "the Great Cicada Invasion of 2024 " , beautifully captured a unique and often overlooked aspect of the spring season. The choice to focus on cicadas offers a fresh perspective and adds a layer of specific details that makes the poem engaging and memorable. By avoiding typical spring-related words, you succeed in conveying the season's atmosphere through the lens of this natural phenomenon. Perfect timing for the Cicada's return in 2024.The structure of your poem, with its concise stanzas, mirrors the brevity of the cicadas' life above ground. This form effectively conveys the urgency and intensity of their short-lived presence. The use of vivid imagery, such as "a triple brood eruption" and "trillions fly about in a great frenzy," immerses the reader in the scene, evoking the overwhelming nature of this event. One notable poetic device in your work is the juxtaposition of the cicadas' natural invasion with human activities, particularly the restaurant scene. This contrast highlights the intersection of nature and urban life, offering a humorous yet thought-provoking commentary on how we adapt to and even celebrate these natural occurrences. For example, the line "Features cicada-inspired cuisine / including chocolate-fried Cicadas" adds a touch of whimsy while grounding the poem in real-life experiences. To enhance the poem further, consider delving deeper into the sensory experiences associated with the cicadas. Describing the soundscape, the tactile sensation of their presence, or even the visual spectacle of their swarms could add another layer of immersion. For instance, "The relentless drone fills the air, / a symphony of buzzing life" might evoke the auditory element more vividly. Overall, your poem succeeds in painting a vivid picture of spring through an unconventional lens. It’s a creative and refreshing take that stands out for its originality and the effective use of poetic devices. I really appreciate your taking time to craft this entry for the contest. Thanks for the support! Sincerely, Brian RWB Judge WDC Angel Army Reviewer  trying to finish up reviews, and hope no big gaffes with this. Let me know if the feedback requires clairty.  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
|
|||
View Portfolio
Visit Notebook
Send Gift Points
Awards
Badges
Send Email
Community Newsfeed
General Discussion
Sponsored Items
Book of Trinkets
Static Items
Books
Groups
Interactive Stories
Audio
Campfire Creatives
Community Notes
Crossword Puzzles
Documents
Folders
Images
In & Outs
Madlibs
Photo Albums
Polls
Product Reviews
Quizzes
Survey Forms
Web Pages
Word Searches
You responded to this review 06/19/2024 @ 11:30pm EDT