it's coming.... [E] free format poem on autumn |
HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE POEM The poem was about autumn and what autumn brings. WHAT I LIKED The poet uses a good economy of words in a succinct fashion to visually put the reader in the season. Well done. STRUCTURE This is a free form poem with no apparent rythme scheme. MECHANICS I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. My only suggestion would be to increase the font on WDC to make it easier to read. DESCRIPTIONS I liked: "Hay rides, unbridled play" The words here are few, but they're still very visual. If you've ever had a hay ride, you can remember those sensations. The hay is a bit prickly, the air is usually cool and crisp, and an underlying feeling/emotion of fun is there. PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS The opening engages the reader and keep them reading. The title hints at what is coming... which words. The title also builds anticipation. I enjoyed the progression of the poem as it progressed much like the season. An Angel Army Review
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