Hi great,

This is a wonderful piece. The title is direct and to the point. The reader knows exactly what they will be getting out of the piece. You introduce the piece by telling the reader exactly what you will be writing about. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. Anyone who wants a place prepared for themselves in Heaven will begin to read to the last word. You have written about how backsliding after we have accepted God into our lives, and Jesus as our personal savior, backsliding from this commitment is a sin. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for your reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:


1)worldly pleasure may appear to be "fun",-"worldly" should begin with a capital letter.

You use an aggressive style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.