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 |  | "Isn't It Pretty to Think So?"  [E] A young woman contemplates a life that may have been.  |
| (5.0)  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"   First Impressions: I must be a terrible cynic because I expected some horrific revelation at the end, maybe that she had killed him, or something along those lines. Of course, it wasn’t that kind of story - I should have checked the genres before I started reading. This was simply a tragic but very romantic story about a young woman who lost her boyfriend to an unfortunate accident, and while she sat at his grave, she thought about all the wonderful things they could have done together, had he lived. At least she knew how he felt about her and that he was planning to make those dreams a reality one day. The descriptions were excellent. I read the whole second paragraph a couple of times because the way you showed her grief was really well done. Even if someone has not experienced the same thing, or experienced it in the same way, the description was so vivid that it was easy to imagine.  Suggestions: I didn’t notice any errors and I don’t have any suggestions to improve this story, so I’m going to use this section to point out a sentence that I thought was particularly well done. I liked the way you described her smile, which sprinkled across her freckled face. I would never have thought to use an expression like that, but it worked.  Final Thoughts: It was clear from the beginning that their relationship wasn’t meant to last as she was visiting his grave. When you mentioned that he wanted to be a pilot, I thought I knew where this tale was going and expected him to die in a plane crash or something similar. But they didn’t even get enough time for him to become a pilot because fate tore him away from her much sooner. Her dreams that all revolved around him and their future life together were shattered, but she had a lovely memory of them even if they never came to pass, and it seemed to help her to think about them. The ending with the rainbow in the distance was nicely done and made this tragic story a little more bearable. A good read!    My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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