Hello, Sonali!

This flash fiction story of yours was featured in an email I received today and I enjoyed it so decided to give you a review. I hope you enjoy this review and find it encouraging and uplifting.


INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:
I loved your flash fiction story! I think it's the first time I've starred in one too.

You kept me riveted and I read straight through to the end. Well done!



MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:

I loved your whole story, from begging to end. Pixie Pwheeler is a great character, if I do say so myself, haha!

I loved that you included Sophy too. She deserves some fame for keeping The Writer's Cramp going. Did you know it's the longest-running contest on Writing.Com?


I loved your use of the potion.


I loved the surprise twist and laugh at the end.


Your flash fiction story was interesting to me, felt like it was happening in fantasy land as I read it, and made me smile.



IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER:
I just noticed one little thing. It's probably a typo. In this sentence: "Hearing thi, Sophy was excited." I think you meant "this" instead of "thi." It's easy peasy to fix, should you choose to do so. If you did, the new sentence would look like this: "Hearing this, Sophy was excited."

Other than that, your story was flawless! I hope you get lots of additional five star reviews on it! I'm definitely giving it five stars, because it made my day a lot brighter. Thank you.


CONCLUSION:
You have a great writing style and sense of fun and humor. Well done!

Thank you for sharing your time, heart, spirit, and writing with the Writing.Com community!

May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance!
PWheeler








A Review from: "Positive Hearts Reviews Group" 




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .