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 |  | Dr. Zhivago and the Cheesecake  [E] One Spock-eared kitten parties down.  |
| (5.0)| Hi Nixie💃💃 ,  Welcome to "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" Mother's Day Raid! Please remember these are purely my opinions, and any advice given is with the sole intention of being helpful. What I liked:  I love the humour in this story. I smiled the whole way through, laughing out loud at many of your descriptions. Dr. Zhivago is one cool cat!. The picture you have used as the cover for this story is fab. I love those purple eyes. It is a great hook into this story. And, wow, what a story. Dr. Zhivago (who looked more like Spock than his namesake!) runs riot over this household. He is very much the star of the show. At the end, where he surveys his handiwork with pride, is so funny. It is the perfect ending. I really like Cassandra's mom. I mean, sure, she's a little highly strung, but I felt for her. She is desperately trying to make her husband's birthday celebrations perfect, but this little kitty has other ideas. When the mother put the cheesecake on the side, I worried for that dessert. Dr. Zhivago would eat it given half the chance. And he did. That's funny. I once cat-sat for a beautiful tabby called Lupin. One night, the phone rang while I was eating a curry. I left it on the table to answer the phone, and when I returned, Lupin was half way through my food! I couldn't believe a cat would like curry. So, I can totally imagine this cat enjoying the cheesecake. The scene of chaos unfolding near the end had me in stitches. I could see it playing out in my mind, and it reminded me of the kind of farce we see in "Fawlty Towers" or "Absolutely Fabulous." It is a very visual description. The scene begins with Mrs. Mortimer tripping on some streamers, and then, enter the doctor: "Dr. Zhivago came from nowhere and vaulted over the stricken woman." I love the image of the cat "vaulting" over her, like he is playing leapfrog. Brilliant!Suggestions: The only place where I stumbled slightly was, " ...to a position of glory—the delicate valance balanced ..." It took me a few reads to understand this. Perhaps, "to a position of glory on the delicate valance ..." would be clearer. Parting comments: I loved this story, Nixie. It's very entertaining. And, despite all of the chaos, I would love to have a cat like Dr. Zhivago. He sounds like he would keep anyone on their toes. Most importantly, keep writing! Choconut
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