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 New Year's Prayer  [E]
a meditation for 2023
by ridinghhood-p.boutilier
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I was quite interested to read this poem, because 'dance' is a big part of Hinduism. The Shiva Tandava is described as a vigorous dance that is the source of the cycle of creation, preservation and dissolution.

In eight lines, you've brought out a philosophy of life and a wish for joy for the 'you' in the poem. The imagery (especially the butterfly eyes) and emotions are very well evoked.

A special shout out for the note at the end about the form. This always helps me understand more about poetry.

My only suggestion would be the use of some WritingML like font, size, color and center to enhance the impact of your words.

Thanks for sharing this one!
Dance On!

- Sonali

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