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Given: May 13, 2024 at 4:19pm
Length: 1,552 Characters |
1,317 w/o WritingML
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THE POEM
A poem dedicated to the fleeting passage of time on New Year's Day.
WHAT I LIKED
I liked the word play in the poem. It was succinct and on point.
STRUCTURE
This an acrostic poem. The word used in the poem is "Ephemeral" which is also defined as a note at the end of the poem. It's the perfect word to use to capture the fleeting moment of the holiday. There is an AABB rythme scheme.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. Good use of WDC ML to make it easy on the eyes.
DESCRIPTIONS
I liked: "Making memories without delay, Ere precious time slips away." Usually we all have something to do on New Year's Day. We ring in the New Year watching the ball drop. We go to a game, watch a parade, whatever it is, it's something we'll remember, but it's only for a day and it will slip alway. Something to ponder when you celebrate.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
The opening draws in the reader and holds their attention. The title fits the poem well. Very nice expression.
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