Hello, Leslie Loo!


INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:
What a lovely and concise love poem!

You kept me riveted and I read straight through to the end. Great way to catch my attention, keep it, and make me want to see more of what you're up to around Writing.Com too.



MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:

Happy Writing.Com Anniversary month! I went to your port to find something to review and this hopeful and romantic poem of yours caught my eye. I hope you enjoy this review as a celebration of your time here and find the review uplifting.

How wild! I also found the love of my life in Japan and we both also love animals.

I wondered if this was some kind of form poem that I didn't recognize or if it was free verse or if it just happened to feel poetic.

I hope your relationship is still going strong and you do both find your ways in life together. Life is better together with someone you love and who loves you back.

I didn't notice any spelling or grammatical mistakes (or mistakes of any kind) in your romantic poem.



IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER:
I would love to have something great to share here, but I think the writing is perfect as it is.

I do have a couple ideas that don't have anything to do with the writing though.

If you wanted to make your item stand out more in searches, and your membership level allows it, you could add a thumbnail picture. Pictures grab people's attention.

I'd recommend changing your "other" genre to "romantic/love" or something else and adding a third genre, perhaps "experience" or "biographical." This could help with showing up in searches and also, should someone nominate this piece for a Quill award, I don't think Contest Entry or other are award options. Whereas I do think the ones I suggested are, so you'd increase your chances of winning in those areas dramatically.

These are just my suggestions though, and while they are meant to be helpful, they are most certainly optional. Do what serves you best, of course.


CONCLUSION:
I enjoyed reading your piece about finding love in Japan! Well done!

Thank you for sharing your time, creativity, heart, and writing with the Writing.Com community!

May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance!
PWheeler













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