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Hello, Hope! INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW: ![]() ![]() MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK: ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER: In the spirit of helpfulness, I one little suggestion to make your piece stronger. If you're interested in some constructive criticism (and your participation in Steven Gepp's challenge indicates that you are), read on. But if I read you wrong and you aren't no worries. Just know that I enjoyed your piece and move on to the next section. Still reading? You're brave! Yay for you! ![]() ![]() Here is the sentence in question... I'm not putting quotations around it because that would mess with your quotes' appearance: Behind her the blackboard loomed with its question: “What do you want to be when you grow up?”. Normally, it is my understanding that punctuation goes within the quotes at the end of a sentence, so even if you left it, the period would go within the quotes, but I think it should just be deleted. If you made the change I'm suggesting, your new sentence would look like this (again, not adding my own quotes for the same reason as before): Behind her the blackboard loomed with its question: “What do you want to be when you grow up?” If I'm wrong, I apologize. I won't let it affect your rating on the off chance that I'm wrong, don't worry. ![]() CONCLUSION: ![]() ![]() May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance! PWheeler ![]() Positive Hearts ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
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