Hello, Hope!


INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:
I loved your one-hundred word drabble story!

You kept me riveted and I read straight through to the end.



MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:

This cute flash fiction / drabble story of yours was the post before mine in "I Write in 2024," so I'm here to give you your review. I hope you benefit from this review and find it encouraging and uplifting.

You did a great job with the prompt and in telling a whole story in only and exactly one hundred words! I am in that challenge with you but still haven't even thought of a story topic. You're acing this challenge!


I could picture the classroom and the nervousness of Marie as I read your story.


I loved the twist at the end. Super finale. Exactly all, in my opinion, that a drabble story should be.


I didn't notice any spelling mistakes in your flash fiction / drabble story.


Your flash fiction / drabble story was interesting to me, kept my attention well, and felt like could have happened in real life.



IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER:

In the spirit of helpfulness, I one little suggestion to make your piece stronger. If you're interested in some constructive criticism (and your participation in Steven Gepp's challenge indicates that you are), read on. But if I read you wrong and you aren't no worries. Just know that I enjoyed your piece and move on to the next section.

Still reading? You're brave! Yay for you!

I'm no grammar expert so I could be wrong, but I think that you don't need the period at the end of this sentence, because it's already punctuated by the final question mark.

Here is the sentence in question... I'm not putting quotations around it because that would mess with your quotes' appearance:
Behind her the blackboard loomed with its question: “What do you want to be when you grow up?”.

Normally, it is my understanding that punctuation goes within the quotes at the end of a sentence, so even if you left it, the period would go within the quotes, but I think it should just be deleted.

If you made the change I'm suggesting, your new sentence would look like this (again, not adding my own quotes for the same reason as before):
Behind her the blackboard loomed with its question: “What do you want to be when you grow up?”

If I'm wrong, I apologize. I won't let it affect your rating on the off chance that I'm wrong, don't worry.



CONCLUSION:
You have a great writing style and sense of humor and I enjoyed reading your drabble flash fiction story. Well done!



May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance!
PWheeler







Positive Hearts
A Review from: "Positive Hearts Reviews Group" 



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .