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 Home of the Gray Dog - Segment 01 Open in new Window. [18+]
Contains chapter 01 through 05
by J. A. Buxton Author Icon
Review by JayNaNoOhNo Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Hello, J. A. Buxton! I'm specifically reviewing only chapter 1, but I appreciate you putting the chapters in one place for ease of reading.

*Checkb*Overall Impression:
The chapter establishes an intriguing premise with well-developed characters and a richly textured setting, promising a complex and engaging story.

*Checkb*Title and Description:
The title is mysterious, suggesting a story rich in folklore or symbolism.

I'm usually quite picky about descriptions—or lack thereof—but their absence here does not hinder the enticement of the chapter, as the title itself provides enough context and intrigue to capture the reader's interest.

*Checkb*Hook and plot:
You've filled the narrative with mystery, philanthropy, and the supernatural echoes of a tragic past. The story weaves historical anecdotes, personal drama, and a modern-day philanthropic venture, providing what promises to be a complex tale.

You immediately pull the reader into a world where the past and present converge in mysterious ways. The plot is dense but unfolds smoothly and logically, introducing various characters and their interlinked histories. You succeed in tying the various narrative threads together, providing a clear direction for the story’s development.

*Checkb*Characters and dialogue:
The characters are vividly described and have distinct voices and backgrounds, contributing to the story’s depth. The interactions provide insight into motivations and drive the narrative.

*Checkb*Grammar and Mechanics:
I have no comments here. It's well done.

*Checkb*Final Thoughts:
This is a promising start to a story that spans centuries and tackles complex themes. The intricate setup of characters and plot points showcases a thoughtful approach to storytelling--well done.

Thank you for sharing your work with us!

JayNaNoOhNo Author Icon*Smile*



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