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The Sand Castle Open in new Window. [E]
Free verse, internal rhyme, assonance, and alliteration. A Shadows and Light Poetry Entry
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Review of The Sand Castle  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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GAMES OF THRONES POEM REVIEW

This is a review for "The Sand Castle" Open in new Window. from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones" Open in new Window.

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*Reading* THE POEM

A heartwarming poem about a day at the beach and the highs and lows of building a sandcastle.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

The poem captures the uplifting ambiance of being at a beach. From the laziness of the day, to the waves drifting up on the shore, to the seagulls flying overhead and the sense of joy and wonder of building a sandcastle to the end of the day and the waves claiming the castle, one can picture themselves at the beach enjoying themselves.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a free verse poem with internal rythme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to make it easy to read on WDC. The poem itself is easy to read.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Salt and spray sail through the air, assaulting the fortress of the sand." -- It's an easy scene that the reader can visualize in their imagination, but it also hints an emotional description, the thrill of the waves teasing the destruction of the sandcastle and hours of hard work.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The title is reflective of the poem. The opening pulls the reader in and keeps them reading. Well written with great visuals using a good economy of words to paint a vivid picture.

Reviewed by StephB for House Targaryen

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