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My Apologies, Mr. Smith  [18+]
A Halloween party is just the beginning of this tale of terror.
by Ẃeβ࿚ẂỉԎḈĥ
Review by Beholden
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Review of My Apologies, Mr. Smith by Ẃeβ࿚ẂỉԎḈĥ

That was definitely different. I confess you caught me out completely with the guy in the back seat. Didn't see that coming at all. A bit easier to guess at Mr Smith's transformation into a bad guy - but such an unusual method of killing. With all those special contraptions in the murderer's car, it really was an automatic!

As well written and edited as all your stories I've read so far, this displayed a perticularly original and unusual imagination, both in the sudden switching of sources of danger, and in the weird killing apparatus. Death by crushing - hardly bears thinking about.

It did occur to me that you could easily make the story longer and more complex by introducing a link between the guy in the back seat and Mr Smith. Smith could have persuaded the shadow man to hide in the car and so give Mr Smith the chance to appear as the good guy. That would give the story even more evil and tortuous machinations behind the ultimate goal. It would make Mr Smith a seriously nasty bad guy in that Sybil would not be his only victim that night - the poor shadow guy ends up sitting in a cell in the police station.

Anyway, it was just a thought. Very good story, and most enjoyable, that's my summary.

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