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~Greetings from a Gruesome Gargoyle~ Open in new Window. [18+]
A Gargoyle wreaking humorous havoc
by Ẃeβ࿚ẂỉԎḈĥ Author Icon
Review by NaNoNette Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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First impression:

The thumbnail is fitting for the title. The genres are well chosen, immediately setting the stage for a mood that is both light with Comedy mixed with the Horror/Scary for a warning added in.

What works:

I am engrossed in a good book or maybe I'm enjoying a gross book. *Right* That is so in character! It made me smile that a Gargoyle would say such things.

The way the Gargoyle just goes on and on about the old librarian makes me wonder if you were using someone that you have seen or met in real life who made your visit to a library not fun, so you put her into your story.

What needs work:

turn of the century period, style architecture. *Right* I can't be sure, but I don't think the comma is needed there.

and startle a patron [comma] I am amused *Right* I am pretty sure this needs a comma where I indicated it.

Final thoughts:

This was a funny and silly read all the way through. Yes, a gargoyle using the whole month of October to haunt a library is a little scary. But it is also very funny. The poor man who got slapped did not know what was coming and why. He shouldn't be in the way of Gargoyles at play.

Annette
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