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One Busy Night in Chicago  [18+]
1930's Chicago,-- Back Street Private Detective, a Girl and a Gangster
by Ẃeβ࿚ẂỉԎḈĥ
Review by Beholden
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Review of One Busy Night in Chicago by Ẃeβ࿚ẂỉԎḈĥ

Well, that was interesting - my first review of a classic style detective story on WdC.
You certainly capture the style of the period, all bored, cynicism and tough metaphors. I don't think I've ever read a detective novel from the thirties (might have done a few short stories) so I'm not really qualified to comment extensively on the approach, but it seems authentic to me.

The story itself was all action vividly described and I followed it with rapt attention.
The plot seemed a lttle predictable, perhaps because we are used to similar stories and TV shows being considerably more intricate and hard to unravel. There was tension in the capture of the girl but Lou dodn't have to do much sleuthing to finish the case successfully. Not sure how you could introduce more mystery, however - it's a very straightforward story.

I did find one minor error in the text: "I'd loose a gun and be left defenseless..."
The correct word is "lose" as "loose" as a verb means to set free or untie.

There's also a technical matter that would be easily corrected if you decide to do so.
The gun he gets from its hiding place on the roof is not specified. We assume it's a pistol. He then proceeds to shoot the gangster through the head with it feom a considerable distance. Pistols are not accurate enough for distance work - it would be better to specify that it's a rifle.

And that's about it - my first detective tale review! Most enjoyable.

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