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Writings for Martell Open in new Window. [18+]
A place to store my Game of Thrones writings.
by Maryann Author Icon
         Review for entry/chapter: "Story Prompt: Rewrite a fairy tale" Open in new Window.
Review by Jayngle Bells Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Hello, Maryann!

*Checkb*Overall Impression:
This inventive retelling infuses a classic fairy tale with modern technology and culture, bringing a fresh and humorous twist to the familiar story. The blend of old and new elements creates a charming and engaging narrative.

*Checkb*Title and Description:
Although lacking a specific title, this story cleverly reimagines a traditional fairy tale by incorporating contemporary references that resonate with today’s audience. The prompt sets the stage for a modern twist on a well-known story. Once the competition is over, I would add a proper title to the entry.

*Checkb*Hook and plot:
Utilizing modern elements in the story humorously updates the traditional narrative. Introducing a smart speaker as the queen’s source of validation cleverly replaces the traditional magic mirror, serving as a compelling hook. The plot remains faithful to the essence of fairy tales while subverting expectations through its modern gadgets and settings.

*Checkb*Characters and dialogue:
Fire Bright is a likable and vivid character, true to the archetypal fairy tale heroine yet distinct enough to stand out. The queen's dialogue with Google adds a comedic layer to her villainous character, enhancing the story's light-hearted tone. The 'seven tweens' made me laugh out loud.

*Checkb*Grammar and Mechanics:
The narrative is clear and well-paced. The story unfolded logically.

*Checkb*Final Thoughts:
Your story successfully adapts a fairy tale into a contemporary setting without losing the charm and moral lessons of the original. The humour woven through the interactions between characters and modern devices adds a delightful layer to the story, making it a pleasure to read. And in proper fairy tale form, you've given some clever commentary on our dependence on technology for validation and the pitfalls of vanity and jealousy.

Thank you for sharing your work with us!

Jayngle Bells Author Icon*Smile*



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