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| Hallo Eregnon  ! I will be reviewing your work "Invalid Item"  for House Targaryen on behalf of "Game of Thrones"  Content: Written for a flash fiction contest, this is a story where the prompt required to be used is 'This place is haunted.' Pluses: Now, with a prompt like that, one can expect anything; the typical being a haunted house. However, our writer kicks things up a notch and takes us to a place we least expect for such a thing...the grocery store.  Well now, guess I'll never look at that place the same way again, especially the 'frozen section'. Brr. In this dialogue heavy story, we are introduced to the main characters, Ophelia and Rick, who are out and about for their normal shopping duties. However, we learn that Ophelia has a gift or rather a sensitivity to the other realm; a talent her partner is not too impressed about. Ophelia is sure there is something strange about a particular section in the store, and while Rick doubts that - especially with his little quips and jokes to try to ease the tension - Ophelia insists. Rick finally concedes and dares to ask one of the employees about any weird history regarding the store. To his chagrin, we come to learn that yes! indeed something strange had taken place there and it was the actual murder of a customer. Which naturally raises a lot of questions for this particular reader. Since this is a flash fiction story, I am not expecting a lot in the way of details. However, through the conversation alone, we get a good idea of each character's personality and their dynamic - which shows a loving but exasperating connection between the two. While Ophelia seems serious-minded and thoughtful, Rick comes across as almost juvenile with his jokes and attempts to brush aside her fears.   Overall, this was a very enjoyable short story to read. Thanks for sharing, and keep on writing!    Disclaimer: The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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