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Review of Lilith Rising  Open in new Window.
Review by Jayne Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
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This is a "Game of Thrones" Open in new Window. review!


Hello, Warped Sanity!

*Checkb*Overall Impression:
A rebellion against subservience and an outright defiance of the status quo? Let me get me shoes. There's no way I'm missing out on that.

*Checkb*Form, Rhythm, Cadence, and Style:
From what I can see, the sestets are structured correctly and used effectively to present the concept of liberation and defiance. Within the structure, it reads freely, and doesn't feel like it was constrained or like you had to force anything to fit (which I know is never true of working in form when you want to say one thing and your poetry form says no).

*Checkb*Content:
Lilith comes across as assertive and empowered, and your use of direct language further enhances her general defiance of prescribed roles. She certainly would not speak softly or care to be polite company. She's brought from myth to modern as a symbol of modern feminism, serving to scream a call to action and resistance of imposed norms.

The underlying concept of a desperate struggle to maintain the patriarchy and leaving no option but outright rebellion to achieve equality certainly cannot be overlooked by the reader.

It was smart to provide some background info on Lilith, as she's one of the ones you either know about or you don't.


*Checkb*Grammar and Mechanics:
I found no problems with grammar or spelling. I liked your strong word choices and the delivery of the sestets.

*Checkb*Final Thoughts:
This is a strong message that will resonate with many readers, for good or bad. Your continued challenging of the reader to explore difficult, and sometimes divisive, topics is a though-line in work, and it one you excel at. This is another great addition to your portfolio.

Thank you for sharing your work with us!

Jayne Author Icon*Smile*


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