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 Slynokio Open in new Window. [18+]
Don't read this or you'll have nightmares.
by Angelica Weatherby-Star on top Author Icon
Review of Slynokio  Open in new Window.
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Hello Angelica Weatherby-Star on top! This review is given on behalf of "Game of Thrones" Open in new Window..

*Reading* This is a cute story. I was afraid the boy was a trap. I'm glad it wasn't. I didn't want to see what happened to the woman happen to the dragon. *Laugh* I thought it was creative how he decorated his cave.

The Title and Description - The name is unique and drew me to your piece. I would write a little bit about what your story is about under the description. Although, to be honest, what you have there did urge me to read on. *Laugh*

The Characters - Your characters are entertaining, and the writing did make me care about them.

The Setting - Good job on writing the descriptions and details that helped me to envision each scene as I read.

What I Liked Best - The personality of the dragon.

I'd space some of your paragraphs, so it'd make it easier to read, and be easier on the eyes.

I have a few suggestions for you below. Please use or discard them as you see fit.

*Notepad* Eyes piercing

Eyes pierced

*Penv* the eldest woman went,

the elderly woman made,

*Books2* a mullberry

a mulberry

*Pencil* slight sound

A comma is needed after sound

*Bookstack* Nothing. Grass swayed

The grass

*Penb* Meanwhile the predator

A comma is needed after Meanwhile

*Notepady* dark colored dragon

dark-colored dragon

*Tack* two week old dragon

two-week-old

Thank you so much for sharing your story with us. I enjoyed it!

*Heart* Tracey



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