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The Not So Calm Before the Storm Open in new Window. [13+]
An odd group of birdwatchers take shelter and trouble brews.
by Ẃeβ࿚ẂỉԎḈĥ Author Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Oh my, what an absurd situation! It plays with essential horror elements in a fairytale way which has us wondering by the end whether the story is as straightforward as it might appear. For one thing, we are presented with an unreliable narrator, who views the people they are entrusted to escort as stupid pests. We also see the narrator’s carelessness in not preparing more effectively for the storm and the journey through the woods. They also display a certain callousness in barging into the unlocked dwelling. Surely they should have noticed signs of current habitation once they got in.

The tension rises as we encounter the ferocious cat, which creates some serious damage to the man and the window. We can’t help chuckling a little when we see the “fedora shaped hole” in the window and marvel that the hat never left his head. The absurdity of the situation escalates when the cat wreaks further havoc and the broom is used ineffectively against it.

So as not to summarize the entire story, which I seem to be doing for some reason, I’ll simply say it was hilarious and sinister at the same time, teasing us with hints of underlying danger and a birdwatching adventure gone awry that wasn’t all that well thought out in the first place.

I would suggest Size 4 Verdana font, and also you might want to tidy up the list of funny people and their characteristics at the beginning. Long lists with several components should be separated by both semicolons and commas for clarity.

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