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The Last Train Ticket Open in new Window. [E]
An old train and old memories
by James Vogner Author Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Review of The Last Train Ticket by James Vogner Author Icon

Beautiful descriptions in this one. The story is very simple, being the tale of an old man's thoughts and experiences as he rides the train through familar territory for the last time. As a snapshot of the old man in the hours of a last, nostalgic journey, it is very effective, evoking pictures and memories in the mind of the reader that echo in the mind with a nostalgia experienced only through the words.

Whether this is enough to justify the piece as a story is a matter for debate. There is no real conflict, for instance, and no resolution possible therefore. That's not a problem for me, since I despise all these laws and rules that people make in an attempt to define everything in the act of writing, but for some it will be. In my opinion, it's a fine piece of descriptive writing and has its place as such.

I did notice one error (the word is "dynamite," not "dynomite") but am not going to quibble over a single letter. The point is that this is a fine piece of work, excellent in its descriptive power and ability to communicate emotion, that lacks slightly in the matter of story. I say that not because of the "rules," but because it needs more plot if it is to fully engage the reader.

Quite impressive, even so.

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