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  |  | Totem Wolf  [ASR] Native American Spirit Guide: Editor's Choice, WDC Anthology, 2012!  |
| (5.0)| Hi Ẃeβ࿚ẂỉԎḈĥ , This review was written on behalf of House Targaryen as part of "Game of Thrones" ! Disclaimer The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise. What I liked ...  This poem is lovely. I've read it five times now, trying to soak in all the words, and I'm sure I've missed things. It feels like a poem about spirituality and discovering nature and Mother Nature, and finding out that we are connected to nature in a profound way. It is also a very feminine poem. In terms of being written from a feminine perspective, and from having feminine experiences. I think most women will understand the struggle between who we want to be, who we are, and who our family wants / needs us to be. It's not that we would ever choose to not have them, but sometimes, we lose a little of ourselves along the way. However, in your poem, you discuss a kind of spiritual awakening. Once you have that, once you connect with Mother Earth, you are able to find yourself. At least, I think that's what you are saying. Technically, I don't think this poem is any set form, and this is absolutely right. You couldn't really write about the open-ness and freedom of spirituality in a poem where all your words and syllables were restricted. You do, however, have the odd internal rhyme, and you have used enjambment wonderfully. I love that little tool, so reading a poem that employs it as well as this one is a pleasure. I also found the poem has a great rhythm. It flows well, and your use of punctuation tells the reader how you want it to be read. There are a couple of places I have to highlight, simply because I love them. "Hope is renewed, / in a bounty that never before existed." That wonder and awe is captured so nicely. Also, I love the imagery of the, "branches of great oaks and the sweet scent of maple after a pre-spring rain." That whole description is fantastic. Oak trees represent stability and trustworthiness, strength. And those pieces of scent you give us — of rain and maple — place us inside the poem world with you.Suggestions: I have nothing. I would do nothing to change this. Parting comments: This is an evocative poem. It (I think) gives a glimpse into your mindset. It's a great tale of a woman's awakening to spirituality and nature. I really enjoyed it. Choconut    My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 04/20/2024 @ 8:57pm EDT