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  |  | Silent Seduction  [13+] What I saw in a moment ...  |
| (4.5)| Hi Ẃeβ࿚ẂỉԎḈĥ ,This review is a part of "Game of Thrones" [13+].  Overall Impression: This is a poem about attraction - the way we feel around our special person. The things that make them them, that can make us smile and blush even after many years of being together. Isn't it nice how we keep on seeing and appreciating those things? That's what happens when we love someone. We keep on seeing them the way that we did when we first met them, and if we're fortunate we actually add bits to that over time, once we get to know them better. A smile that's just for us. The way their muscles flex just so. Those who are fortunate get to appreciate the other for the rest of their lives. On the technical side of things, this poem reads well. I like its rhythm and flow. I loved the colour you used for this piece - it suits it. I also very much appreciated your use of punctuation. Well done! Suggestions: I do have a couple of suggestions, dear Webbie. I hope that you'll find them helpful! Stanza 1:  I’m caught in mid-blush . The space before the comma can be removed. General Suggestion: As I mentioned above, I was grateful for your use of punctuation. In line with this I suggest allowing the capitalisation at the beginning of each line to depend upon the individual sentences within the piece. That would perfect the overall clarity and reading experience.My Rating: This is an excellent poem about love and attraction. I enjoyed the read. I did have a couple of suggestions. Nothing major, though. Therefore, I will give this item a rating of 4.5 out of 5. Thank you for sharing your work. Write on! Kit   The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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