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Greetings from the House of Mormont! By participating in a Writing.com activity called "Game of Thrones" ![]() ![]() Your port raid begins, hon ![]() Goodness, what a surreal story. I wasn't sure what was going on, as one peculiar thing after another happened. It doesn't quite hold together... I mean, the beginning with the dwarf (is there some more PC medical term?) and the envelope of money doesn't have anything to do with the ending. I'm a little confused. But I do understand the main point, that a mother wants to hold on for her children. I know I've considered that as a central theme of a thriller kind of story myself. It has a lot of potential. Anyway, I'm reading this on my phone, so I don't know how you've formatted it. Presumably you're aware of the "size 4 Verdana font" mantra around here. A spooky story that melds realism and fantasy in a way that reminds us of a great truth of life. I enjoyed reading it and I don't really have much to offer for suggestions. Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing ![]() The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise. ![]() ![]() "The WDC Angel Army" ![]() ![]() ![]()
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