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Review #4745739
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Story: If Coffee were outlawed, I would go this far to get my hands on coffee beans! I still cannot wrap my brain around that. Great job with the prompt and telling us all about Clyde and the lengths he went to to get the coffee beans back to Grosenwitz for the dictator's nephew.

Spelling/Grammar/Issues: *Thumbsupl*

Description/emotion: Starting the story with why Clyde is on this mission, and then going into these particular coffee beans set the stage for the rest of the story. I liked how he hid the beans in medical supplies, never once considering that their strong aroma would attract others. Kudos to Miss Bonnie for instantly knowing what was going on. I feel others have come to that hotel with their loot, ready to attempt to cross the border with the contraband. Bonnie is certainly knowledgeable about border crossings. Clyde offering her her salary to accompany him on this adventure was cute. She didn't waste any time accepting the offer.

Overall: Great ending. I chose not to read the prompt at the beginning, and I'm glad I didn't because it wasn't until the very end that we learned his name, Clyde. That worked well with the modern-day Bonnie and Clyde prompt. These characters would work in another short story if you were so inclined.




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