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 |  | A Healing Day for Rhea  [ASR] Rhea's daughter, Miranda, is united with her healing horse.  |
| (5.0)| Hi Maryann , This review was written on behalf of House Targaryen as part of "Game of Thrones" ! Disclaimer The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise. What I liked ...There is a healing horse! How awesome is that?  This is a lovely, little story about the healing power of parents and animals. This story is set on Neptune thousands of years in the future. I love how the school children and their teacher have the opinion of humans from Earth being inferior. Because, I guess, compared to them, they are. The kid who doesn't see the point in learning about humans made me laugh. Also, how the teacher says a lot of them have some percentage of humans in them. Straight from the beginning, you let us know where and when this story is taking place. This poor teacher, Rhea Vesta, needs a shot of confidence. She doesn't believe she is a good teacher because she doesn't believe she is a good mother to her seven-year-old daughter, Miranda. This is where I have to mention Sadie, the healing horse. How wonderful this would be. Everyone has their healing horse who heals them. All they have to do is lie on their horses back. They restore your energy and mend wounds. I love that. I also liked how Sadie was missing, but Rhea knew where to find her because she knew her daughter's and Sadie's habits. This proved to Rhea she was a good mother. I hope she managed to take this confidence through to her classroom. I really like how the class is learning about their Martian ancestors, showing us that these Neptunians are way in the future from us today. I like how, despite this difference in time, the feelings and emotions of Rhea, and the reactions of her pupils, could easily have been written about people in the 21st Century. It is very relatabie. This line is my favourite of the whole story: "She's lost quite a bit of life essence, and no one can find her healing horse." That made me sit up straight. What is a healing horse? I wondered. And, life essence? How does that work? Great writing there. I love how you just slipped this in. Also, this mention of Rhea's implant chip made me smile: "Rhea checked the small bump at her temple and realized that it was indeed accidentally shut off." Love it!Suggestions: I only have one place to consider (and this is me being super picky). "Sometimes I wonder why I took this job as a History and Stella Cartography teacher. I’m not good with children. My own daughter, Miranda, is so impulsive and uncontrollable at times. It’s no wonder I have no discipline in my classroom." These are the internal thoughts of Rhea. They don't feel completely natural. When we think, it tends not to be in complete sentences. So, for example, the the first part of the sentence could be, "Why did I take this job? History teacher? Huh!" Parting comments: This is a most enjoyable story, Maryann. Thanks for sharing, and, most importantly, keep writing! Happy WDC Account Anniversary! Choconut   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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