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My Apologies, Mr. Smith Open in new Window. [18+]
A Halloween party is just the beginning of this tale of terror.
by Ẃeβ࿚ẂỉԎḈĥmas Author Icon
Review by Jeff Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Hello Ẃeβ࿚ẂỉԎḈĥmas

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*Penw* Positives

This story effectively captures the tension and suspense typical of a thriller, using Halloween as a backdrop. The protagonist's gradual realization of danger, mirrored by her transition from a mundane party environment to a life-threatening situation, is handled well, creating a sense of dread. The narrative successfully blends the mundane with the terrifying, using a Halloween party as a familiar setting that quickly spirals into an unexpected nightmare. The twist ending is shocking and leaves a lasting impression, illustrating the story's descent from deceptive normalcy into horror.


*Penw* Suggestions

While the story's climax is dramatic and engaging, I think earlier parts of the narrative could benefit from tighter pacing to enhance the build-up to the final revelation. Additionally, exploring the protagonist's emotions in greater depth, for me, could add layers of psychological complexity. Providing more background on the characters, especially Mr. Smith, might also enrich the story, offering insights into their motivations and making the final twist more impactful.


*Penw* Overall

Overall, this story is a gripping and well-crafted piece that effectively uses the elements of suspense and horror to engage readers. The gradual escalation of tension, combined with the protagonist's initially dismissive attitude towards Halloween, creates a compelling narrative arc.


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Jeff Author IconMail Icon
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