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 | Consolation  [E] Wallaroos in a zoo  |
| (5.0)| GAMES OF THRONES POEM REVIEW This is a review for "Consolation" from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"   The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.  THE STORYIt takes a lot to make Charcoal Charlie, a kangaroo, happy.  WHAT I LIKEDI enjoyed the voice used in this short story. With a hint of whimsy, and bit of distain, Charcoal Charlie tries to adapt to his new habitat but it's not the same as the bush.  POV NARRATION/TENSEThis is told in the third person limited from Charlie's perspective. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately. DIALOGUEThere's a nice blend of dialogue and narration. Dialogue tags are used appropriately. DESCRIPTIONSThere's enough to set the scenes. I liked: "Phooey!" Charlie thought. "She clings to Joey like a sloth to a tree. Foolish woman." -- Great description of Mommy Miranda as she keeps an eye on Joey, but also hints at Charlie's personality. Well done. SETTINGTIME: modern day PLACE: zoo on in the States on the Pacific Coast. This is something that is clarified for the reader. CHARACTERSCharcoal Charlie It's tough being a kangaroo in a zoo, but there's one that will make Charlie happy...  MECHANICSI did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The story is easy to read. PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONSThe opening engages the reader. I was ready to follow Charlie's adventures from the first sentence! The story will put a grin on the reader's face. I could easily see this story as a children's book. Reviewed by StephB for House Targaryen  }
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