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Lou Ryan's new case: Dames, Gams, Goons, Goners & Bribes
by Ẃeβ࿚ẂỉԎḈĥ Author Icon
Review by Jeff Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Hello Ẃeβ࿚ẂỉԎḈĥ

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*Penw* Positives

This latest of Lou Ryan's adventures maintains the rich, engaging storytelling of its predecessors. The introduction of Zeke and the complex web surrounding his case makes for a compelling narrative, expanding the world Lou navigates with his gritty charm and sharp wit. The dialogue continues to be a strong point, capturing the essence of classic noir with a modern twist. The dynamic between Lou and Gloria is particularly well-drawn, offering moments of levity and genuine connection that enrich the story.


*Penw* Suggestions

The narrative would benefit from deeper exploration of Zeke's background and his relationship with Lou, as I think this would provide more context for the emotional stakes of the story. Additionally, I feel like the pacing in the middle sections could be tightened to enhance the build-up to the climactic moments. Integrating more visual descriptions of the settings could potentially enhance the atmosphere, drawing readers deeper into the scenes. I also think that expanding on the motivations and actions of secondary characters like the judges and the antagonist would add depth and make their eventual outcomes more impactful.


*Penw* Overall

Overall, the story is a great addition to the saga of Lou Ryan, packed with suspense, intrigue, and the charm that defines the series. The plot twists are well-executed, while the development of the relationship between Lou and Gloria adds a satisfying emotional layer. This tale continues to build on the strengths of its characters and setting, making for a compelling read.


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Jeff Author IconMail Icon
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