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Review #4745040
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 Good Morning Open in new Window. [E]
The true essence of a New dawn
by Emerick - The Preacher Author Icon
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Review by Choconut Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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What I liked ...

*Bulletr* This is a wonderfully positive poem, and it made me smile as I read it. The mystery and possibilities that each new dawn brings is such a great message. I love how your narrator reminds us how special each fresh morning is, and that we should cherish them. Your final line is perfect: "A world of possibilities, one of a kind." That sums up the message for the whole poem.

*BulletR* In the most part, there is a wonderful rhythm. Your aabb, ccdd, etc. rhyme scheme adds to the flow of the words, making them seem fluid and easy. There are a few places where the rhythm is a little off, but I will come to those under the Suggestions heading.

*BulletR* The imagery you use is a joy to read. The way you compare a new dawn, and the new life it brings, to life in general really appeals to me. These lines in the sixth verse highlight what I am talking about: "But a gateway to realms unseen, / Where each dawn brings a chance to thrive."

Suggestions: I have a few suggestions for making the rhythm a little more even. I have put them in a dropnote, so you can read them as you wish.
Rhythmic Suggestions ▼

The other place I would look at is the second verse, where you rhyme "call" with "call." This stood out to me, and I might try to find an alternative word for one of them.

Parting comments: This is a great poem. It really makes me feel good when I read it. This great mystery of every new dawn, of the possibilities each one brings. Fantastic!


Choconut
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