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 health care advice  Open in new Window. [18+]
5 Methods for Practicing During Sensitivity Season
by husam Author Icon
Review by JayNaNoOhNo Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
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Hello, husam

*Checkb*Overall Impression:
This is a well-crafted, well-written overview of environmental changes and their impact on allergy sufferers.

*Checkb*Title and Description:
The article's description, "5 Methods for Practicing During Sensitivity Season," is intriguing. Where I am from, it is called allergy season, which may entice more readers to click on your advice.

Switching the title and description around may help attract more readers, as the title "health care advice" might be too generic to garner much interest.

*Checkb*Content and Flow:
The content is very informative, and the flow of the article is linear and laid out logically. It covers numerous strategies for managing exposure to potential medications, with quotes from medical professionals. Linking to the original sources where the medical professionals' comments were found would lend credibility to the overall article.

Although it is structured well, the transitions between sections are a bit choppy. Refining the move from one section to another might help it read more naturally.

*Checkb*Grammar and Mechanics:
The grammar and spelling are, for the most part, appropriate. Some small redundancies could be removed, and some phrasing, such as "it's precisely more challenging for air to get from your nose into your aviation route," is confusing.

The overall content is solid, but some clarity on the complex and unnatural-sounding sentences will improve readability.

*Checkb*Final Thoughts:
This is a helpful article for people looking to reduce their allergies while maintaining an active lifestyle, which can be a challenge, especially in the spring.
The article's overall quality is good, providing practical advice and actionable steps.

Thank you for sharing your work with us!

JayNaNoOhNo Author Icon*Smile*


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