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The Darkest Sky Open in new Window. [E]
Strange things are happening...!
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Review of The Darkest Sky  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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A "Game of Thrones"  Open in new Window. by Gaby Author Icon Review


Storyline: Merari and her brother, Jabari know something is wrong by the hushed voices of their parent. Jabari tells her that he cannot complete his chores because the crops have been destroyed, and the locusts have arrived in droves. Before long, the darkest night arrives, which later they discover lasted three days.

Spelling/Grammar Issues: *Thumbsupl*

Description/emotion: The reader and Merari have a good connection. I could feel her confusion, dread, and fear as things transpired around them, out of her control. She looks to her father to clear things up, but he, too, is trying his best to keep things together as the battle between Moshe's God and Pharoah continues. When the night encroached, and the children couldn't even move from their spot outside, you made that easy to see. Her father's happiness when the sun came out and he located his children could also be felt.

Overall Impression: This is an impressive take on what happened between Moses and the Pharoah. Good job using the prompt of the Darkest Night. This story was very creative, taking history and weaving it with the prompt. I can only imagine what the fear of knowing you will lose your firstborn would be. Congratulations on winning the Writer's Cramp. Well deserved.




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