Hi Sindbad! I found your story to be adorable! I couldn't expect what it would be from the title, but from the brief introduction, I had a feeling that it would be cute. It was, indeed!

I never thought about what twins would be thinking in the womb. I felt it was clever of your to write a story about them and what might be going through their minds.

As they kept saying, 'life after delivery', it made me think it was a play on, 'life after death', and that would add a philosophical or even biblical aspect to your story. In any event, I felt that you created a nice twist on that.

I thought you did a great job in showing that the twin's mother was resting, enjoying the breeze and beauty of a garden, unaware that her unborn babies were pondering thoughts about life after delivery. Bringing your readers back to her in the garden at the end was a great closure to your story.

You created the twin's personalities well. One twin thought with positivity, contemplating that there must be something else other than what they have been experiencing. ...A life after delivery. The other twin felt that such thoughts were unrealistic. I thought it showed your creativity in having that twin question suggestions about possibly being able to walk with their legs or eat with their mouths instead of having to depend on an umbilical cord. He questioned the idea of, 'Mother', in general.

You expressed the optimism of the first twin well. He didn't give up with his determination to convince the second twin. He told him to focus and listen for her loving voice. That was sweet. If only the mom resting in the garden knew and was able to reassure her babies!

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