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 Exploding Daisy? Open in new Window. [E]
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by SandraLynnSprinkles Slingin' Author Icon
Review of Exploding Daisy?  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Storyline: A Giant tells his tale of a common saying, going off subject and coming back, adding in information he deems part of this tale. He lays out the tale of the exploding daisy, how it came to be, and what happened in the aftermath.

Spelling/Grammar Issues: *Thumbsupl*

Description/emotion: I found the Giant rather charming in delivering this tall tale. He didn't mince words, was a little sidetracked here and there, and explained why - all those words in his big brain, racing to get out! It must be excruciating. Good moments of humor make the reader smile as the story unfolds. Once the daisy becomes a dandelion, the reader can understand where this tale of the exploding daisy is headed. I didn't expect to find a dragon included, but that also worked well in the story. I could picture that sneeze so clearly, and the description of the poor dragon being launched up into the air was great.

Overall Impression: I liked that the story was directed straight at the reader. The Giant was indeed telling it all to me. It is an engaging story and you worked the prompt in really well, right off the top we know what the objective is, and the story didn't disappoint, just changed to fit this lovable Giant.




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