Hi Gwilym John ,

I have the pleasure of an anniversary review for your item as part of the "Game of Thrones"  challenge.

Prose
I love that you've taken a different angle here, that of not wanting to know all the truth.

You started strongly, leaping directly into metaphor, it was intriguing and I wondered where you would take it. That unusualness of it was exciting, in major poem feel alive and fresh.

The next set of vs was on different metaphor focus: of cooking. The cooking didn't resonate with me is well, but I'm sure it's covering all the different bases of personality types that will enjoy what you've got to say here.

But you got me back on board with the spinning metaphor, very cool! In such strong words, sounds like a cry for a noose! Quite bizarre really, but shows the desperateness of love.

It's wild and intense.


My Favourite

You should’ve bent the truth, blacksmith!

I can't help it but I just like that first line so much, I really can't get past it.


My Recommendations
I would have liked it if that final set + 5 lines as well in matched your previous rhyming pattern. I didn't quite see a reason why you'd want to break that, and having one line left out made me feel like I was missing something.

Overall

This is powerful and strong poetry, you have real energy in your expression. Fabulous.

Thank you for sharing your work!
Hope


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