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 |  | O Mohonk  [13+] A visit to a wonderful place that left me breathless!  |
 This is a "Game of Thrones" review!Hello, Wraithy WiԎchy of Woe!!  Overall Impression:I love the use of alliteration in this poem. Form, Rhythm, Cadence, and Style:There is a natural ebb and flow to this poem that takes the reader on a slow, meandering walk through Mohonk. There's plenty of sensory detail and alliteration to provide vivid imagery and emotional depth. Content:Mohonk sounds breathtaking and peaceful. Highlight the natural beauty and tranquility, along with the scents of lilac, cherry blossoms, moonlit nights, and breathtaking views, are a sensory bonanza. With such intense sensory detail, the reader can't help but have an emotional attachment to a place they've never been. Or, if they had been there, they would undoubtedly have had some nostalgia kick in. Grammar and Mechanics:I found no problems with spelling or grammar. Your use of alliteration in this poem is top-notch, providing a sing-song pull into the picturesque painting (see what I did there?). In all seriousness, your use of the poetic device is wonderful. Some of the lines that really hit me were: Breathtaking views be-feast the eyes - This line could have easily become bogged down in excessive language, but be-feast the eyes complete an entire image all on its own. Small creatures scatter, to secure stations for the night - So much alliteration in this one, yet it slips by barely noticed because it reads so well. It feels secretive, indicates a quiet business beneath the calm, and may reflect your connection with nature, a common theme in your poems. Final Thoughts:With its feeling of peace, the place and the poem provide a sanctuary from the business of daily life. It was lovely to read. Thank you for sharing your work with us! Jayne 🕸️ 🕷️   My approach to reviews: "I'll Explain, but not Disclaim" The views and opinions in this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and, therefore, do not necessarily reflect the group, activity, and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.
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