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Totem Wolf  [ASR]
Native American Spirit Guide: Editor's Choice, WDC Anthology, 2012!
by Ẃeβ࿚ẂỉԎḈĥ
Review of Totem Wolf  
Review by Jayne
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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Hello, Ẃeβ࿚ẂỉԎḈĥ!

*Checkb*Overall Impression:
This is a wonderful read on a profound spiritual awakening.

*Checkb*Form, Rhythm, Cadence, and Style:
Using free verse to explore the complex emotional landscape was a solid choice for the unpredictable spiritual journey. Using fixed meter may have presented too many constraints to match the necessary fluidity of the poem and detracted from the mystical and rich imagery. I had no problems with picking up the cadence or inherent rhythm in the words.

*Checkb*Content:
This a transformative experience for both the writer and the reader. Its introspection and self-discovery through the totem wolf provides a concrete concept in an otherwise mythic type of poem, allowing readers who may not understand the metaphor to have something to relate to.

Being challenged by your spirit guide and confronting the unknown shows a strong link between the self and the natural world, emphasizing the transformative power of spiritual connection. Your language is very precise but still provides us with a vivid picture.

If I were to nitpick, providing more in terms of initial resistance might provide deeper insight as to where you were in life before the transformation. But, I mean, even I think that's pretty nitpicky, and I'm the one writing the review.

Your use of other concrete nature words (pines, oaks, maples) further serves to unify the spiritual and the natural world, subtly calling for unity and harmony between the two and challenging the reader to consider their own path and then if it is truly the path they want to be on.

*Checkb*Grammar and Mechanics:
I found no problems with spelling or grammar.

*Checkb*Final Thoughts:
With its narrative of spiritual discovery and introspection, this was a pleasure to read.

Thank you for sharing your work with us!

Jayne *Smile*


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