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White Balloons  [ASR]
I passed by a cemetery today...
by Ẃeβ࿚ẂỉԎḈĥ
Review of White Balloons  
Review by Jayne
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hello, Ẃeβ࿚ẂỉԎḈĥ!

*Checkb*Overall Impression:
This poem is a beautifully written tribute to grief and loss.

*Checkb*Form, Rhythm, Cadence, and Style:
The poem flows naturally, and I found it enhanced the observations you've provided. This poem is more blunt (perhaps straightforward is a better word) than a few of your others I've reviewed, but it's nicely balanced with rich imagery and sensory information.

*Checkb*Content:
The imagery of the white balloons contrasting with the dark colors associated with grief provides a stark contrast that emphasizes your empathetic and observant exploration of life and death. By taking the point of view of a stranger and expressing the emotions the gathering would feel, it points to the universal connection we all have when it comes to loss, especially that of someone young.

Choosing white, particularly a white balloon, is a powerful symbolic gesture. The reader is free to interpret it on many levels, including the traditional concept of the innocence of the child's life. Others may find the white offers a sense of peace, either for the potential end of suffering in death or a wish for peace for the mourners. The balloons are also a symbol of release, a symbolic way of allowing the spirit or emotions to drift away. It can also be interpreted as releasing the spirit or emotions into the hands of a higher power, depending on one's personal beliefs. I think it was a solid choice to incorporate into the poem.

*Checkb*Grammar and Mechanics:
I found no problems with spelling or grammar. I like your use of punctuation, particularly questions, to engage the reader to pause and reflect.

*Checkb*Final Thoughts:
Given its universal theme and accessibility, this poem should evoke an emotional response in any reader. Great work!

Thank you for sharing your work with us!

Jayne *Smile*


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