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 | The Great Ship  [18+] The final minutes on the Titanic, and they did their best.  |
| (5.0)| GAMES OF THRONES STORY REVIEW This is a review for "The Great Ship " from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"   The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.  THE STORYThe Titanic is going down. The story takes a look at 3 different scenarios into how people handled the sinking of the ship.  WHAT I LIKEDI really think the vinyette format worked well here. We meet Joseph who is going to play "Nearer to God to Thee," but has never gotten it quite right, A young couple who wants to experience something they never have before, and a group of men drinking and smoking, as if that's all they can do as the ship sinks.  POV NARRATION/TENSEThis is told in the third person omniscient. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately. DIALOGUEThere's a good blend of dialogue and narration. Dialogue tags are used appropriately. DESCRIPTIONSThere's enough to set the scenes. I liked: "The ship was now listing thirty degrees to starboard.." The author used a good economy of word to paint an accurate visual in the reader's imagination. SETTINGTIME: 1912 PLACE: The Titantic This is something that is clarified for the reader. CHARACTERSEnsemble cast There's enough here to understand each character's motivations. Joseph just wants an opportunity to get it right, Sophia and Teddy just want an experience they've never had, and the group of gentlemen decide to go down as gentlemen.  MECHANICSI did not spot any spelling/puncutation mistakes. The story is easy to read. PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONSThe opening engages the reader and sucks them in emotionally, putting us in the beginning of the sinking of the ship. The dramatic elements are played pitch-perfect. An emotional read that's well done. Reviewed by StephB for House Targaryen  }
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You responded to this review 04/12/2024 @ 1:46pm EDT