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Lunch with a forgotten stranger (entry for 2/10/09 Writer's Cramp)
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Aww, this was so nice to read. I really appreciated the buildup to your heartwarming climax. I didn't start guessing until the end, though I suspected it was something of the sort because I've read other anecdotes like it (surely you've read the one where the soldier goes to the hospital to tell the old guy that his son died, and instead he becomes the man's son for a few hours until he passes away? That was a tearjerker...)

Your story feels autobiographical, for either you or someone you know. Taking care of our elderly parents is a privilege we must all have a part of someday, whether large or small, and the ability to live within the same neighborhood as one's parents under medical care is a creative idea.

The little details like the Jeep and the business card add realism to the story.

I always suggest size 4 Verdana font; I read this on my phone, so I'm unaware of your formatting choices. Also, I know it's been a long time, but it would be fun to know what prompt it was written for.

Thanks for sharing, take care, and keep writing *HeartG*

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