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 Chili By Candlelight  [13+]
A young married couple have an explosive evening, in more ways than one.
by Sophy
In affiliation with House of Sensual Prose  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Storyline: Ray and Laura have their life planned out for them, especially the baby timeline, which is still three years away. Ray has made chili for dinner, and the couple have playful banter until they sit down to eat dinner. Ray is quick to make jokes to try and lighten the mood when things turn a little ugly, but Laura isn't having it. Suddenly, a sound rings out and sends Ray and Laura under the table, taking shelter.

Spelling/Grammar Issues: *Thumbsupl*

Description/emotion: I loved how these two characters have fun with each other, five years into marriage. They certainly know each other well enough to take things a little further, and Ray seems to know when he should stay silent, though that's tough for him. The emotional crying and laughing from Laura were great. I could identify with those conflicting emotions, and you showed them well. The chili explosion was unexpected, but it brought these two back from the brink of an argument.

Overall Impression: When I first read the description for this short story, I seriously thought it would be more of a physical explosion, with Chili in the title. Nice to be proven wrong. *Laugh* Very enjoyable story.




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