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Bubba's Corner BBQ  [E]
Trying to give a tourist directions to Bubba's
by 🪽intuey🕊️
Review by Jayne
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello, 🪽intuey🕊️!

*Checkb*Overall Impression:
This is a quirky tale with quite a chaotic explanation!

*Checkb*Title and Description:
The title is obviously fine, but I think the description could be developed into something more intriguing for the reader. Right now, it is a little flat and sounds more like an explanation than a comedic romp.

*Checkb*Hook and plot:
The hook comes in early enough when the second speaker begins his rather detailed explanation of how to get to the place. The plot, being totally dialogue-driven, unfolds in a fun manner. I can't really say it unfolds in a logical manner because the logistics of Bubba's location are absurd (in a good way!). But the story does flow in a linear manner and isn't difficult to follow—unless you're the one looking for Bubba's BBQ!

*Checkb*Characters and dialogue:
I wouldn't expect deeply developed characters in a story this short, and what you did give us with dialogue is well done and keeps the comedy consistent throughout the story. The townsperson's dialogue really sells the character. It feels like you've entered a small little town and run into the guy who knows all the history about everything that's happened since a bunch of generations ago.

*Checkb*Grammar and Mechanics:
I know grammar doesn't matter for the Writer's Cramp, and most of the "grammatical errors" are part of colloquial speech and wouldn't need correction anyway. The only thing I noted was the last line:

Now he's sandwiched between Hardware and Fabrc. Should that read Hardware and Fabric ?

*Checkb*Final Thoughts:
This is an entertaining explanation of where Bubba ended up and why. It's a complete narrative within its small word count and is a quick and enjoyable read.

Thank you for sharing your work with us!

Jayne *Smile*



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