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Lunch with a forgotten stranger (entry for 2/10/09 Writer's Cramp)
by Writer_Mike
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Review by SandraLynn
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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"Game of Thrones Hello Fellow Writer! My name is Sandra. I am one of the sly foxes.
First Impression: What a nice, caring individual I think of the narrator. He not only notices a stray senior wandering through his neighbourhood, he decides to assist him. A meal is offered to the walker and he in turn shares some stories and history with his benefactor. I would say that is a great trade. We should all appreciate what seniors have to offer. All we have to do is give up some of our free time and listen. The ending is unexpected. These two men are not strangers at all, although one endures Alzheimer's.
What needs your attention: Nothing. I like this story as is.
What part I liked best: The opening sentence sets the subsequent scene and hints at something amiss. Like wise, the ending is a complete revelation. Slowly, the stranger's need to meander and depart the care facility is revealed. He has memory loss. I like that you do not glorify this, or become sentimental/weepy. Dancing with Alzheimer's is a delicate venture. The repetition can be monotonous and inevitable. Sadly, Alzheimer's respects no one.
Overall Impression: This is a great, subtle piece of writing. Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure. What does the fox say??? Listen carefully.
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