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![]() | Over My Dead Body ![]() Mom muttered these words once too often. ![]() |
Hello SandraLynn! This review is given on behalf of "Game of Thrones" ![]() ![]() Title and Description - You title grabbed my attention and your description urged me to read on. Character - The daughter's emotions come through loud and clear with your words. Her sadness is palpable over the loss of her mother. Setting - The setting is an intimate one of mom and daughter. Both before the mom passed, and after. What I Liked Best - The revealing of the tombstone. ![]() Below are a few suggestions. Please use or discard them as you see fit. ![]() I heard her gasp for air. ![]() Comma needed after Mother ![]() Comma needed after allergy ![]() overnight ![]() No comma needed. ![]() fingernails ![]() once believed ![]() Comma after Yes ![]() Comma after Finally Thank you so much for sharing your writing with us. I enjoyed it. ![]() The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise. ![]() ![]()
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