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Wile E Coyote and The Roadrunner Open in new Window. [18+]
Wile E, Coyote fires Acme Corporation and Files Law Suit
by Chrys O'Shea Author Icon
Review by Jeff Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Hello Chrys O'Shea

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*Penw* Positives

This was a fun and really entertaining story. As a fan of the old Coyote and Roadrunner Looney Tunes cartoon, I really appreciated all of the detail you put into this piece, including specific inventions that Wile E. Coyote used in the cartoon (and making the infamous rocket sled the centerpiece of the trial)! *Bigsmile* I thought the premise for the story was excellent and highly enjoyable. The ending was great too; if I were Home Depot, I'd also have thoughts about partnering with a litigious and questionable-competent customer! *Laugh*


*Penw* Suggestions

This is a bit of a nitpick, but the legal procedure wasn't terribly accurate, specifically with the judge asking questions essentially after she determined the decision, and introducing questions as to motive at the end of the trial when that's typically something that would be handled by the defense counsel. It's doesn't have to be an exact reproduction of court process or anything, but given how many people watch legal/court shows now, a lot of them are amateur "legal experts" and might notice this deviation even from the creative license taken with the legal system as they've come to understand it through television series.


*Penw* Overall

Overall, I thought you did a great job with this story. It was inventive, entertaining, and a really fun read for anyone familiar with the old cartoons. Well done!


Respectfully,

Jeff Author IconMail Icon
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