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| (4.0)| GAMES OF THRONES STORY REVIEW This is a review for "Snowed In" from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"   The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.  THE STORYMegan has to stop at a lodge when a blizzard hits.  WHAT I LIKEDThe ending is satisfying in a personal kind of way. We're worried for Megan, but we know she's safe, and now it's an opportunity for her to "power down" and relax, and she may not have had that chance in a long time.  POV NARRATION/TENSEThis is told in the third person limited from Megan's perspective. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately. DESCRIPTIONSThere's a lot of description to set the scene. I liked: "Megan took a sip from the steaming mug of hot chocolate she'd ordered in the dining room." It put me right in the moment with Megan. SETTINGTIME: modern day PLACE: rural, traveling setting This is something that is clarified for the reader, and it's why Megan is in a pickle right now, due to the blizzard. CHARACTERSMegan Megan sounds like a woman with common sense as she packs expecting a snow storm and has enough sense to find a lodge when the blizzard picks up.  MECHANICSI did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONSThe title is a good fit for the vinyette and the opening draws the reader in. If anything, I would have liked to have seen this developed a little more. Maybe Megan meets a nice man at the lodge and strikes up a friendship? Or meets an old friend? It's mostly narration, which is fine. You could always develop her more as a character. Overall, it's a nice vinyette that develops the setting well. Reviewed by StephB for House Targaryen  }
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