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 Exploding Daisy? Open in new Window. [E]
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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GAMES OF THRONES STORY REVIEW

This is a review for "Exploding Daisy?" Open in new Window. from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones" Open in new Window.

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*Reading* THE STORY

The narrator knows the real reason for the expression "Exploding Daisies," but are you ready to hear it?

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I enjoyed the conversational tone of the story. I felt like I was drawn right into the narrator's confidences and a ring side seat to the story.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the first person by the narrator who is a giant. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.


*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Suffice it to say, "I'm height enhanced." Prior to this there's a tad more description, told in a comical way, and I'm just chuckling. I could easily picture our narrator in my imagination.

*Star* SETTING

TIME: not sure
PLACE: for whatever reason I'm picturing a beanstock, but I think it's near a mountain.

I don't think time in this story really needs to be defined. Just still back, read, and enjoy.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Giant narrator

He's a fiesty tall guy and if you believe his exploding daisy story, I say two thumbs up. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The title fits the story well and the opening engages the reader with a nice, easy style. If anything, I might suggest spacing between the paragraphs and maybe increasing the font to it's easier on the eyes? Overall, a light hearted story that's enjoyable!


Reviewed by StephB for House Targaryen

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