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![]() | Soul Mates ![]() Second Place in WDC Inspirational Quote contest. ![]() |
Hello Hyperiongate ! This review is given on behalf of "Game of Thrones" ![]() ![]() After her death, they find each other again. Though he can hear and see her, no one around them can. But he doesn't let that bother him. He wants to get to her as soon as possible, and it's her aim to help him do so. Your story is well written with strong characters whose love for each other strongly comes through. Neither can live without the other. Your setting is vivid and allows the reader to envision each scene as they read. I enjoyed the creative twist toward the end. It was sad how long he spent there, but at least he was locked into a world of his own. The closing is nicely done. The addition of the students just seeing him moments before is a nice addition. Below are a few minor suggestions. Please use or discard them as you see fit. ![]() Comma needed after unheard ![]() anyone who could ![]() Comma after food ![]() went by, and the pages ![]() He felt surprised ![]() Arop his head, his hair ![]() His cheeks sagged ![]() his institute's ![]() Fearing the worst, Thank you so much for sharing your writing with us. I enjoyed it. ![]() The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise. ![]() ![]()
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