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 |  | I Don’t See The Juncos, Anymore  [E] Publisher's Pick in the 2014 WDC Anthology.  |
| (5.0)| Hallo Ẃeβ࿚ẂỉԎḈĥ ! I will be reviewing your work "I Don’t See The Juncos, Anymore" on behalf of "House Targaryen Points" for "Game of Thrones"  Content: Written as a free verse poem, this pays tribute to the lovely bird species called the Junco. Pluses:Don't laugh when I say I went 'awww' at the end of reading this. It's so very clear that you and Nature are one, and the love you have for your surroundings and everything that encompasses it, is present in this poem. From the emails we've exchanged, as well as your updates on the newsfeed, being up North seems to mean so much more to you. In this poem, you paint a rather magical setting (and though I'm no fan of the cold and snow), I'd love to be able to sit on the porch to witness some of the sights and sounds you highlight in this piece. Your imagery is vivid and brings to life the habits of these adorable birds (because yes, I did have to google to find out exactly what they looked like). With such lines as: Starkly they stand-out, sweetly flitting, flirting; so it seems, a perky pair brush against one another. Why wouldn't one want to adopt them?  Another stand out section was where you described the setting of the trees where they perch on after snowfall: ...It will cover the long-armed boughs of the fir, fitting them like a well tailored shirt. Such is the unstarched finery from above. It is so very easy to picture that scene while reading. As for the ending of this, it's almost bittersweet as you are back South where it's unlikely for a Junco to be...or is it? For you believe that one just might have flown down to join you there if even for a moment. How magical would that have been? Suggestions:Here are a few things I noticed while reading. Please remember that these are only my suggestions/opinions and it's ultimately up to you to choose what works best. No suggestions come to mind as this was a lovely piece to read.    Thanks so very much for sharing and keep on writing!   Disclaimer: The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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